My Name
My name, a child of the gods
Youthful and feminine I am supposed to be
My name whether Jillian, Jullian, or Joanne it is strong
It is attached with a voice of independence and strength
Jack and Jill went up a hill but Jill did not come tumbling after
The sound of it flows from mouths like water flows down a stream
Slow and smooth, fast and rocky, however you want it to be
I've only encountered one other, I guess I should thank my mother
My name it is just for me
I hear the jingle bells ringing and ornaments scattered about
I see my brothers and sisters all gathered around
I keep looking and looking but my name is nowhere to be found
I am a lonely fish in the sea
Lonely but extraordinary
My name which I am rarely called
"Hey Jill could you do this for me?"
"What's up Jillee Bean?"
Some days I just want to be Jillian Lee
I like how you are very confident in your name. Your poem describes you greatly.
ReplyDeleteI like how you put the part with jack and Jill in the poem. It really goes good with it.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described yourself in your poem and how smoothly it went.
ReplyDeleteI like how you describe your nicknames with a rhyme scheme. I also liked how I could imagine what was happening in the poem as you read it :)
ReplyDeleteJillian,
ReplyDeleteGreat job! When you say your name is no where to be found, is that because it is not in any typical gift shops? Or do you mean in general it is uncommon?
I loved how you organized your writing. Good job! :)
ReplyDeleteI adored your metaphors, flows from the mouth like a stream....I can relate to wanting to be called by your birth name but for me sometimes I just want people to call me by my nickname. The birth name can some times be "over used".
ReplyDeleteI really love your post! I loved the part where you said "the sound of it flows from mouths like water flows down a steam". Your poem was very cute!
ReplyDeleteJillian, I still love your poem a lot! The descriptions you used always paint a vivid picture for me. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI thought it was great, I like how you described it as, "The sound flows from mouths as water flows down a stream."
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem a lot Jillian. I especially liked your simile and gave me a clear picture and the rhyming was excellent as well.
ReplyDeleteI like how you wrote lonely but extraordinary because in this case it's awesome to have a name no one else has except a few.
ReplyDeleteJillian, I really liked your poem, and it was really good. I
ReplyDeleteAlso liked your use of rhyme.
Great poem. Your name really is extraordinary.
ReplyDeleteI like how you just want to be you, to be Jillian Lee, and how you are rare but that is what makes you extraordinary.
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